Wednesday, February 18, 2009

Blog 4

Foreign Athletic Limits
I feel that this paper should get a C- because of a couple issues. One issue I had with this paper is the writer did not support his/her opinion very well. I was not persuaded that he/she was very persistent in proving their point. There was, however, good citation of the sources. Another issue I had with the essay is there is an abundance of grammatical errors.

Online College vs. Online High School
This paper would have received a B+ from me. I fell that way because unlike the first essay it had very few grammatical errors. Also the writer's theses statement was well supported and proven immediately. The essay was well put together overall.

Predisposed to Divorce
This paper would most likely receive and A or A+ from me. I say this because the paper was VERY well organized and it flowed very well. The writer proved his/her point and suppported their opinion throughout the whole paper. There were a few punctuation errors that were almost not noticable. Other than that this paper is the best overall.

NAACP Case Agianst Gun Manufacturers
I would have given this a C-. I say this because first of all, there was very little support to the theses statement. However, it was presented well almost immedeatly. The sentence structure and flow was not very good and if it was the writer could have written a much better paper.

Monday, February 9, 2009

video game draft paragragh

Butler, the writer of "Video Games: The Answer to Adolescent Aggression," was in protest to the comments of the media about the correlation between violent video games and violence in reality. Butler stated that just like the restaurants should not be blamed for obesity neither should violence be blamed on video games. He said that ever since the incident happened at Colombine High School, the media and population have been trying to pin the blame of violence on these animated massacres. He goes on to say that video games should not be blamed for the "heartless idiots that follow through with such horrendous acts..."(Butler 1).

Monday, February 2, 2009

Video Games

In the article, "Video Games: The Answer to Adolescent Aggression", I feel that the writer's comments make a lot of sense. Israel Butler states that the crime and violence rate should not be blamed on violent video games. He also stated that obesity should not be blamed on fast food restaurant advertisements. I feel the same way because people control their own minds and make their own decisions at their own will. Many violent and even deadly acts have been known to somehow be traced back to these violent video games. These video games are very unrealistic in most of their attributes compared to reality. For example, in some of these murder-filled games the main character is able to take multiple shots from firearms and/or other damaging weapons and still survive, breathing walking,and even running as if nothing happened. This is just one of the many ways in which these games cannot be treated as realistic in any way. On the other hand, I do agree that yes these games can influence the minds of younger children, but as the child matures he should be able to realize that some of the things that happen on these games are impossible to accomplish. It is good that ratings have been placed on these games in an effort to reduce the number of younger children purchasing these games, but where there is a will, there is a way, and these children will still be found playing these games no matter what.